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[pacman jr love]

Again?

You submitted the same thing twice with little improvement. Sorry it got blammed the first time, I actually thought it would pass, but with a low score though. Maybe this one will do better. But, if not, try doing some big improvements as opposed to little ones.

Things you might do:

Art - Assuming you are the voice actor, then you are clearly young and your recent submissions show you are a beginning artist. This submission has improved over your other three, so a little bit more and you'll be great.

Story - I don't care to see Pac-Man Jr. fall in love with a pebble, but that's me. The flow of the story was good, and the joke although mediocre fit with the story.

Ending - Change it. Those kind of crossovers are annoying and bland. And for me, even when mainstream television does that to their own show, I don't really like it. It detracts from the original story.

Music - Fit the story perfectly, and sound was great, nothing to worry about there.

Voice Acting - Voice was clear, and your voice fit for a PM Jr. voice, but you need to improve your annunciation and dialect a little bit so it doesn't sound like you are reading from a script.

Overall - 4. You get a minus because you submitted it twice with little changes, but the previous effort still showed.

[The Brickwall 2!]

Enjpyable

It ended abruptly, and when it looped, the song on the first run didn't end, and it clashed a little bit as the song overlapped it on the second loop.

I suggest this being longer or come to a less immediate ending. Keep it up.

alcaknight responds:

Yeah, I guess it did end quite arubtly. I am going to make another one that will hopefully be much better. Thanks for watching!

[I Found A Dollar!]

Nifty

I saw it as the blue guy was dancing to the base, and the gray guy to the melody.

Short and to the point. It is very surprising that it wasn't blammed, not because it was bad, but because it wasn't great. I enjoyed it because I believe it had good enough quality considering and was good for slight amusement. Just confuses me when this gets through but some other things don't.

Again, not bad, but not good.

[The Bard's Song]

Not good enough.

This is one of my favorite songs ever, was glad to see someone made a flash of it. however, the flash just disappointed me so much. Choppy animation, not all that great a story. Does not do the song justice.

[Link Gets Hurt Once Again]

Agh!

So many ways for Link to get hurt, which means you have a lot of work to do, assuming you continue the series.

For a 'not a noob' flash artist, Bob117 is certainly asking a lot of noob questions.

[The Anger of Animation 3]

better

Liked it more cuz it was more original than the first two, whereas they seemed to have too many similarites to AvA, this one added some nice touches.

KobraEditing responds:

Thanks

[I hate MAC ads]

Mac or PC?

I use Free BSD, and I just compiled interface.

Love the animation, great jokes about the different systems.

[GhostFight-BOS-Part1]

Camera

Only bad thing about this is I didn't know what button did what until I pressed it, and sometimes it didn't seem to respond, but everything else was amazing. No penalties for the camera movement just cuz you got a big bonus for including them in the first place.

[The Anger of Animation 2]

Deja vu!

It was decent but it just seemed like too much of it ripped off from AvA. Yes there are very few original things now anyways, but this was way too similar.

[Random Stuff The Awexome]

I can't hear anything!!

Was mildly interesting, you definitely need audio. And if you did have audio already, then something went wrong. So yeah, try again but with sound. Funny sounds are good, or a song that syncs with the video and vise versa.